Captain Grime (Hero concept)

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Captain Grime

Description:
A savage warrior and a ruthless leader, the best place to be is beside Captain Grime, the worst place to be is in front of him.

Quote:
“To get this valley under control, I need warriors who are fierce, cunning, and above all, ruthless!”

Role: Damage.

Position: Front.

Team color: Red.

Entrance: Runs in and unsheathes a sword.

Victory: Gets a can of Bog Grog, drinks it, then burps.

Defeat: Tries to swing at an enemy, but faints before he can.

Basic Attack: Slashes at an enemy with his sword.

White Skill - Furious Leap: Grime shoots his tongue at the furthest enemy, dealing X damage and lowering their Attack Speed and Walkspeed by 30% for 20 seconds, then slashes 3 times, each dealing X damage.

Green Skill - Bog Grog: Grime drinks a can of Bog Grog, healing X health and granting 300 energy, then burps, pushing back and silencing enemies, this silencing effect has a chance to last only 1 second for enemies higher than level X.

Blue Skill - :

Purple Skill - Fearless commander: Captain Grime now does X more Damage, X more Armor, and X more Max HP.

Red Skill - Leader of the Toads: Grime heals 20% of the damage he does and gains 15% more energy
Additional bonuses

  • X more Max HP
  • X more Damage
  • X more Armor
  • X more Reality

Friendships:

Captain Grime and Chief Bogo
Name: Substitute Commanders
Chief Bogo and Captain Grime trade places with one another. Both are disappointed from the other’s forces and respects one another for being able to deal with them for such a long time
Description: Allies gain Armor with attacks.
Stars:

  • X percent of basic damage dealt turns into a temporary Armor buff lasting 10 seconds.
    Level
  • +X Armor
  • +X Reality
  • +X Max Health

Captain Grime and Dr. Bunsen and Beaker
Name: Brawn and Brain
Dr. Bunsen and Beaker try to prevent Captain Grime from destroying lab equipment, but are ambushed by toons and respect each other when creeps ambush them.
Description: Healing improved
Stars:

  • 5% more health healed back on heal
  • Healed allies do 30% more Damage and attack 15% faster
    Level:
    • X percent more Health Regen
  • X more damage dealt

This is my first hero ever made, feedback would be great

#2

How long does the Silence normally last?

In the future, please finish your concepts before posting them. It is always better to take more time to finish a concept than post an unfinished one quickly.

This needs to be reworded. For one, skills that allow a character to do more damage usually only apply to one or two skills or their basic attacks. Second, you can’t “do” more armor or max HP like you can “do” more damage, so they need to be in their own sentence saying that Captain Grime “gains” them instead.

This could do with at least one more effect to make it stronger.

Red Skills only give 3 stat boosts, not 4.

  1. Percentages need to be set number values, not variables.
  2. Basic damage is a stat, so it cannot be “dealt”, unless you were referring to damage from basic attacks.

The official terminology is “HP”, not “health”.

That’s… a very small boost to healing.

There should probably be a time limit to this stat boost, or else this could get out of hand if it’s stacked enough times with enough healing.

Again, needs to be a number, not a variable.

And again, boosting damage dealt should only apply to one attack, not everything.

If you haven’t already, I seriously recommend reading this guide for more advice on how to improve your concepts.

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