Carl Fredrickson

[Defender_Momo_LV]

Role)damage

Stars)2
Position) front line
Trial) blue
You in the suit yes you take a bath hippy
Normal attack)Carl hits the enemies with his cane
White skill-doug’s helpfulness)Carl throws a tennis ball at the enemy with the most hp after that Doug starts attacking that enemy (similar to jasmine)dealing fantastic damage
Green skill-hearing aid refresh) Carl refresh’s his hearing aid giving him 75 or more energy
Blue skill-get right up)when Carl reaches low hp he remembers Ellie and gets his attack speed up by 300% and deals 3456 damage each basic attack
Purple skill-healing aid) Carl’s hearing aid also heals himself 6754 up
Red skill-up and away) Doug’s helpfulness now does 3x damage
Entrance) Carl’s house lands on the ground and carl comes out
Defeat)Carl gets grumpy
Victory)Carl smile’s for a bit
Friend’s)mad hatter and Carl
Disk) Carl’s green skill has a chance of blinding
Carl and Belle
Disk) Carl’s white skill now stuns

Mad hatter Disk name)MD hearing aid
Belle disk name) book for old people

[Grim_grinning_Ghost]

Friend’s)mad hatter and Carl
Disk) Carl’s green skill has a chance of blinding
Carl and Belle
Disk) Carl’s white skill now stuns

Disk names?

Entrance) Carl’s house lands on the ground and carl comes out

I think this is to big of a thing to be in a entrance and where is the victory

Blue skill-get right up)when Carl reaches low hp he remembers Ellie and gets his attack speed up by 300% and deals 3456 damage each basic attack

Did I read this right?

You in the suit yes you take a bath hippy

Um, what is this

[Defender_Momo_LV]

I kinda made this in a rush

[Imagineer_V]

I have feedback. The concept is not that great, but it is creative so do not be discouraged.

It needs a format, even if it is simple. That way it is easier to read. Here is an example:
Name of hero
Needs an Image of the hero
Description
Quote
Stars
Role
Position
Trial Team
Animations (includes entrance, victory, defeat, and basic attack)
Skills (white, green, blue, purple, red)
Friendship disks: (name of the concept hero/name of other hero, campaign title, campaign description, allies, disk, disk star effect, disk X effect)

Now onto your concept itself:

You in the suit yes you take a bath hippy

What is this and why is this here. This makes no sense.

White skill-doug’s helpfulness)Carl throws a tennis ball at the enemy with the most hp after that Doug starts attacking that enemy (similar to jasmine)dealing fantastic damage
Green skill-hearing aid refresh) Carl refresh’s his hearing aid giving him 75 or more energy
Blue skill-get right up)when Carl reaches low hp he remembers Ellie and gets his attack speed up by 300% and deals 3456 damage each basic attack
Purple skill-healing aid) Carl’s hearing aid also heals himself 6754 up
Red skill-up and away) Doug’s helpfulness now does 3x damage

These are just bad. White skill is fine, but the others are just not good and do not fit his damage role.

I offer help to new concept makers so you can improve and do better. I can invite you to my concept previews thread and help you make your next concept if you would like. I can also send you the link to my concept collection so you can look at some good concepts.

[Defender_Momo_LV]

Oh okay send me the link

[Imagineer_V]

Sorry if I sounded harsh. Here is the link.

[Prince-Aamir]

“you in the suit yes you take a bath hippy” is the quote guys.

And it’s “You in the suit, yes you! Take a bath you hippy!”

[Defender_Momo_LV]

You know looking back at this concept I’ve noticed how much I improved over the past 4 months…